It is a good source, but you should "quote" what is in the source. At first glance, I think those are you thoughts, but after seeing the source, I realize almost is from the article. The author's point of view is very convincing, but I seldom see your comment or your "own" thoughts in this annotation. I think you can choose some important sentences to support what you have mentioned in your issue paper before.
And you can organize or list the author's points, not just quote all.
To sum up, compare to your issue paper, this annotation points out why you said that divorce is not a good choice for unhappy marriage. It makes your point clear. Good.
Me:
OK! Thanks for your suggestion. You are right about that I have to quote from the reference instead of just summarizing it all.
2.蘇俞臻:
I don't think that if people have a emotional affair can still remain the completeness of a family, because he/she might want to spend more times with his/her new lover. Also, the lover might hope to build a new family with you. And,actually kids are very sensitive, they will notice that their parents don't like each other anymore, this does not have any good benefit to kids' well-beings.
Your article is based on the situation that the couples can reach a consensus. However many extramarital affairs happened not because couples have poor marriages, but for excitement! What is your opinion or solution for this kind of situation?
Me:
That's why they have to reach an agreement! And for the desire of the lover to get married, that is the problem the husband/wife has to deal with since they have reached an consensus that maintaining family's atmosphere. And to answer your last question, just because his/her marriage is unhappy, he/she pursues comfort or happiness from other woman/man.
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